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I want to write a poem by =Calibre-Not-Output:iconCalibre-Not-Output:



I want to write a poem
but I don't know what to write.
The right words, I don't know'em;
and my head feels rather light.

My lyric voice is hoarse,
my writing hand is weary,
my drafts are awful coarse,
my themes are very dreary.

I want to write in verse.
I want to slant a rime.
But my muse is perverse:
she's rendered me a mute!

My metric is inconstant.
Apparently, I've lost the ability to count.
I can't even keep
the same number of lines in every
stanza.

At least I haven't resorted
to visual poetry just yet.
Nothing against it, mind you,
but to a formalist like me
that would be my last breath
when I'm already fa
                               ll
                                 in
                                    g
                                      d
                                        ow
                                             n.

I just want to write a poem, but it seems I don't know how.
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Author's Comments

I blame this poem entirely on ~johnbjuice who keeps telling me that I should try to write in a more modernist style for experience.

I'd love some serious critique for this. If you're not in the mood for that, well, I hope you get a few laughs.

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:iconpepstarsworld:
Considering the mental blocks I've been having lately...I have to hand it to you. Bravo!

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:iconjohnbjuice:
haha this was rather entertaining!

an interesting commentary as well. i think this deserves a fav.

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:iconcalibre-not-output:
Thanks for the :+fav:, I'm glad you liked it.

After writing it, it occurred to me that this might be an involuntary ripoff of your "structure, etc." but I assure you it wasn't intentional and I hope you don't mind.

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:iconcalibre-not-output:
Thanks! :bow:

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:iconoo-rein-oo:
I like it :D

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:iconjohnbjuice:
haha they are quite different takes on a similar idea

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:iconcalibre-not-output:
Glad you do.

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:iconjohnbjuice:
party! :D

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:iconsilvaz:
Modernist style? O_O what's that...

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Out here in the fields
I fight for my meals
I get my back into my living
I don't need to fight
To prove I'm right
I don't need to be forgiven


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